Your task is to write a "Slice of Life" recount using a range of poetic language features. Ensure you use similes, metaphors, personification and onomatopoeia. Using different co lours, highlight yoursimiles using yellow, your metaphors using blue, your onomatopoeia using green and yourpersonification using red.
Write your recount here:
The strong gust of wind struck me like a hundred racing cars zooming past me. Then, ever so slightly, my hair felt like it was dancing around on my head and then, I suddenly realized that my cap had flown off. The first movement I did was turn around and gasp. Then I saw my cap floating and gliding in the strong wind. As I chased after my cap, a sand storm had formed and pushed my cap further from me. As I chased after it in desperation, I finally caught the hat. A few minutes later, a tremendous gust of wind blows and lifts the cap off my head again. Then, I knew that the hunt begins..again.
Self reflection: I thought that this was good.
What did I do well?
I think I used verbs well.
What could I do to improve my recount?
I could put some metaphors and onomatopoeia.
The strong gust of wind struck me like a hundred racing cars zooming past me. Then, ever so slightly, my hair felt like it was dancing around on my head and then, I suddenly realized that my cap had flown off. The first movement I did was turn around and gasp. Then I saw my cap floating and gliding in the strong wind. As I chased after my cap, a sand storm had formed and pushed my cap further from me. As I chased after it in desperation, I finally caught the hat. A few minutes later, a tremendous gust of wind blows and lifts the cap off my head again. Then, I knew that the hunt begins..again.
I think I used verbs well.
I could put some metaphors and onomatopoeia.